Ive been chilling around on my ds so i wanted to take a break, so i made a story, called Joeys Adventure


Joey was a young trainer, and he enjoyed playing with his rattata. He went to prof birchs lab to get some pokeballs. He got some, then he went out in the wild he trained his rattata up to level 13 he was walking around cherygrove city He saw a bush! It lookd like poison was surrounding it he slowly walked to the bush... And a koffing jumped out!(level 11) he defeated the koffing so he caught it. he went to violent city next, so he entered the gym but then... a trainer with brown pants and blue hair with red gloves and a green shirt walked up to him, He said Hello joey, Joey asked him how he knew his name. He said my name is daik. daik? joey asked hoy do you pronouce it. day kuh daik said Oh. joey wondered well why do you have something in your hand... SMASH! Daik hit joey so hard he fell on his rattata.
What was that for joey asked.. and why do you talk so slow. Suddenly I CHALLENGE YOU JOEY! daik said daik had a lickitung level 32 and a bagon level 27 joey lost...


MORE COMING SOON!!!!!

Data Daik! daik is a 13 year old child who is a orphan he only has pokemon, but he just has 2 cents and okedollars as money his favorite color is white. he hopes of becoming the pokemon champion for his family who died, his favorite pokemon is gengar, because he thinks it suits him very well Data Joey! joey is a famous trainer who has a mom and dad but they are hardly home his brother nicolas helps him eat breakfeast joeys favorite color of is blue and red he enjoys fighting types loves water types and is a great fan of bug pokemon his town is on route 1 as nicolas flies him to johto often, joeys signature pokemon is rattata Data Nicolas! coming soon

Rate the story and tell me why you gave it that rating, also i will reply to anybody as soon as i can!

My Rating
*** of *****
Mr Heracross, I enjoyed the story but you might wanna add someone detail. Just saying their team and that Joey lost didn't captivate me much. Heres a basic Battle line: Deino had gotten up from the last attack, bruised and battered it tried once more to hit enemy Froslass.
* Are Stars FYI

ill try to add more details thanks

If you want I could help you add more detail to it maybe help write it?
Only seeing that you would let me

Sure you can help.

Flame was just riding by the cities when he saw a Battle unfold, a Bagon and Lickitung had just beat a Trainer and their Rattatta and Koffing. He stopped by and said "You ok? That was a intense and hard battle against a quite stronger enemy."

Flame [Based off my save from BW]
Flame was a 2nd place ranker in the Pokemon League, he let his friend win as a gift. Flamie waits for the next League by helping young Trainers out.
[Back History]
Flamie started out like any other trainer, except he had quite some run ins with Legendaries and Team Plasma. After stopping their plans he entered the tournament, Flame easily blew through enemys due to intense training.